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Inu No Ongaeshi by Shmarah

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made by Shmarah for LD24 (COMPO)
A short visual novel made with Ren'py that has 2 bad endings and 2... endings.
Somewhat based off of the Japanese folk story, "Tsuru no Ongaeshi," also known as "The Crane Wife."
In "Inu no Ongaeshi," you play a lonely freelance writer, if, with your lack of motivation, you can even call yourself that. One morning, you meet an injured dog in the forest- rather, a dog girl. A magical, evolving, speed-writing, food-conjuring, future seeing dog girl.
Good luck with that.

More of a story than it is a game, in how I approached writing it and how it plays. (Hence the term visual novel.) Unfortunately, I don't actually like the plot as a story; it feels a bit cliche. Forgive me. ;;;
Controls:
Click/Spacebar - Advance the text
Right click/Esc - Open the in-game menu
Scroll up - Rollback text (You can't rollback past important choices/scenes)
Click- Clicking things. :-]

This is my first Ludum Dare at the age of 14. I hope you enjoy the game.

OS/X https://docs.google.com/open?id=0BzJOA-8quGxuQ3IyeTNIY2t5VkE
Windows https://docs.google.com/open?id=0BzJOA-8quGxuSkJkQUk0MWhIZGM
Linux https://docs.google.com/open?id=0BzJOA-8quGxuRFNUbDdVX2VsVHM
Source https://www.dropbox.com/s/2o7ch9kws4cvme5/scripts.zip
Original URL https://ludumdare.com/compo/ludum-dare-24/?action=preview&uid=15672

Ratings

Coolness 93% 2
Overall 3.07 316
Audio 2.53 333
Fun 2.54 503
Graphics 3.09 312
Humor 2.79 163
Innovation 2.49 529
Mood 3.56 55
Theme 2.74 433

Feedback

rylgh
27. Aug 2012 路 03:07 UTC
Heads up, Google Drive says I don't have permission to download the OS X or Windows builds.
Rose
27. Aug 2012 路 03:09 UTC
I can't wait to try this game! But when I follow the OS/X link, Google Docs says I don't have permission to access this item...
馃帳 Shmarah
27. Aug 2012 路 03:25 UTC
Yikes! Should be fixed now.
vicethal
27. Aug 2012 路 03:54 UTC
emotional story. Interesting take, to do a choose-your-own-adventure... very nicely done.
mdkess
28. Aug 2012 路 01:32 UTC
This must have been a lot of fun to make! Well done.
Timster Studios
28. Aug 2012 路 02:24 UTC
Very interesting concept. Although, the story was quite long at points and hard to keep following.
thewiseguy99
28. Aug 2012 路 03:13 UTC
Cool idea, very different. I liked it/
ggiraldez
28. Aug 2012 路 03:21 UTC
Nice story. Got the bad end #2 but I enjoyed it.
sev_inf
28. Aug 2012 路 05:17 UTC
Liked it. Got ending #1, will try to get a better ending.
johnfn
28. Aug 2012 路 06:24 UTC
OH MY GOD. That was incredible. The quality of your writing is outstanding, even more so that you're only 14! It's incredibly smart and funny. The ending is beautiful. I got ending 1. I looked over your source to make sure (I'm a horrible person!) and it seemed like I didn't really miss out on anything in the game.

Great work. I hope to see a lot more from you!
AirRider3
28. Aug 2012 路 10:02 UTC
Brilliant! I loved the game. I tried to get all the endings. Cheers!
Sergey Mohov
28. Aug 2012 路 21:14 UTC
This is a brilliant piece of writing. I even had to get all of the endings, which never happened to me before :-) You're really good at this and you should continue writing.
tastive
29. Aug 2012 路 02:16 UTC
Bravo! The Crane Wife influence is evident, but you've taken story more seriously so far than anyone else I've seen. Compelling to finish.
daydalus
29. Aug 2012 路 02:38 UTC
Wow, definitely the most original game I've played so far. I like how you combined pictures with text, and the story was well written. Actually reminded me a bit of The Wind-Up Bird Chronicle by Murakami for some reason (stray animals and strange women). Would have liked to have a little bit more control of the dialog/story, but overall was a nice experience. Well done!
rhysvdw
29. Aug 2012 路 02:38 UTC
I'm impressed by your writing and how polished this project is. However the dialogue went on for too long without any control from the player... There were many times where I'd have liked my character to have behaved differently. It felt a bit like a linear story with a few token options tacked on. Nonetheless, good work.
davisan
29. Aug 2012 路 04:52 UTC
I loved this! The mood, text, backgrounds, sound effects. I got all the endings. I tried to make a visualnovel some years ago, but i never finished it.
Nice work!
mes
29. Aug 2012 路 04:56 UTC
Interesting to say the least, but I think you kind of have to be into the whole fur thing. Otherwise, it was well written and I thought filtering photos was a good way to get art done quickly. I would have liked more options to interact, however.

Good work.
darkstarmatryx
29. Aug 2012 路 20:12 UTC
I really liked the story. I got Bad Ending #2, but will most likely play it again to see the good ending. I wish there were more choices. You did a great job scenes and sounds.
tmt_01
30. Aug 2012 路 00:12 UTC
The game is great! I really liked it.
But I wanted to stay with the dog girl... :(
Gidaio
30. Aug 2012 路 00:17 UTC
This game was not fun. But it was engaging. It was brilliant and very interesting. Except it was more like a book, not a game. Yes, I understand the term 'visual novel.'
Thurig
30. Aug 2012 路 08:36 UTC
Too bad, I can not download this for the Mac.
Zed
30. Aug 2012 路 16:11 UTC
That was really pretty. Quite well-written, good graphics but as someone previously commented, I'd have liked more choice. There are some things I actually felt myself getting angry about, when they happened (particularly the ending - I got ending #1). Please consider going further with this, and writing in more choice.
DevWouter
30. Aug 2012 路 17:18 UTC
A mother who jokes about getting a pet? I don't think my mom would have approved :)

Anyway lovely story, maybe a new york best selling ;)
localcoder
02. Sep 2012 路 09:00 UTC
I enjoyed this.

There's a bug, where the game displays "Dearest %(name)s" instead of using the actual name.

I played four times to get all the endings. I like how all of them are sad :')
kibertoad
07. Sep 2012 路 23:11 UTC
Was pretty meh till it got to the ending.
Ending saved it.
ConflictiveLabs
16. Sep 2012 路 05:02 UTC
Loved it! :) It's one of the few games I've played to the end. In fact, I played it more than once, to get a different ending (didn't discover the saving system the first time I played :/)