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You Villain by CNIAngel

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made by CNIAngel for LD25 (COMPO)
It's a text adventure story. I'm making it in Twine. You're a villain in a fairyland world. Make a difference in that world by being terrible.

Warning: This is pretty much not for kids at all. I hold no responsibly to how you feel after playing this Twine game. Seriously.

EDIT/UPDATE: I am currently working on a longer, more detailed, and hopefully better version of "You Villain." Stay tune if you wanna feel like a villain ;)

Web https://dl.dropbox.com/u/37769419/LD25/YouVillain.html
Source https://dl.dropbox.com/u/37769419/LD25/YV_Source.txt
Original URL https://ludumdare.com/compo/ludum-dare-25/?action=preview&uid=7081

Ratings

Coolness 50% 3
Overall 2.42 652
Fun 2.64 461
Humor 2.96 222
Innovation 1.91 724
Mood 2.76 374
Theme 3.92 69

Feedback

dan.jeffrey
15. Dec 2012 路 16:55 UTC
The DL link goes to the Dropbox homepage, bud. :P
馃帳 CNIAngel
15. Dec 2012 路 17:13 UTC
I know xP I don't have a build up yet. Working out a couple things.
mamoniem
17. Dec 2012 路 04:37 UTC
what a strange game !
馃帳 CNIAngel
17. Dec 2012 路 04:51 UTC
Why thank you :)
loren
17. Dec 2012 路 07:07 UTC
great narrative, love the intro instalose choice hah
Dark Acre Jack
17. Dec 2012 路 07:08 UTC
I could think of worse things than being stuck with a "chick".
cwilloughby
17. Dec 2012 路 07:15 UTC
I like it. Would love to see it fleshed out more.
Suese
17. Dec 2012 路 07:36 UTC
charming
AaronYip
17. Dec 2012 路 07:52 UTC
Woo! Everybody's happy. :D Charming game, agreed.
馃帳 CNIAngel
17. Dec 2012 路 20:19 UTC
I'm glad that everyone is enjoying it so far :) I wish I had made it longer though.
Bloodyaugust
17. Dec 2012 路 22:02 UTC
Short, filled with grammatical errors, not much detail to set it apart. Would've liked to see more quality out of a text-based 48 hour game.
馃帳 CNIAngel
17. Dec 2012 路 22:32 UTC
Thanks for the criticism :) I should point out that I did this in an hour, not 48 of them. It would've been a lot better.
HackThePanda
18. Dec 2012 路 01:43 UTC
For the time he put into it I think it's pretty funny, wish he would have been able to finish his other game though. CNI you should do one of these weekly, with different themes each week and post them on twitter
HackThePanda
18. Dec 2012 路 01:44 UTC
You could follow interesting techy/social stories throughout the week and then make text-based comedy adventures based on them. Like you could have made a text adventure on the shooting.
On second thought maybe this isn't a good idea.
Cake&Code
19. Dec 2012 路 00:40 UTC
loren took the words right out of my mouth, I had to press that first choice. Epic end.

The writing was fun, but it was a bit short (or it feels that way because there are so many branches). Good work! Hope you expand upon it :D
Tobias Wehrum
19. Dec 2012 路 00:41 UTC
Okay, you obviously nailed the theme. (Probably with real nails. Driven into the remains of a princess.) Apart from that, it's a bit short and well - every second move ends the game. When nearly every move is an ending, choice seems to be a bit arbitrary. The humor was nice though.

I think I would've enjoyed the game more if it featured a longer coherent story line. But then again, I just read the comments and found out that you made it in only 1 hour, and for that it's pretty good I guess!
raubana
19. Dec 2012 路 00:49 UTC
The story starts. "You're the villain"........FIVE STARS, TRIPLE PLATINUM, 4 STARS, A+
馃帳 CNIAngel
19. Dec 2012 路 02:47 UTC
Thanks everyone! :D I'm about to update the summary in a second, but I am currently on a longer and more detailed version of "You Villain" :) In a perfect world it should be done before the year ends.
h.attila
22. Dec 2012 路 00:37 UTC
I agree that it's a bit short. Also, I haven't tried every variations, but I almost always won. It should have more ways to fail.