{"author_link":"\/author\/wazoo\/","author_name":"wazoo","author_uid":"2820","comments":[{"author_name":"ananasblau","author_uid":"3562","time":"Aug 26, 2013 @ 4:57pm","epoch":1377535920,"text":"You are not finished yet, right?\r<br\/>\r<br\/>Anyways, I always had my problem with those text adventure &quot;games&quot;, this time round I tried on myself and I think I see what I didn't like.\r<br\/>\r<br\/>Is it twine that limits you to put your links to the other scenes at the bottom of each scene? I have a long history of administrative work in wikipedia and applied that to how I did my game. I find a long wall of text, short paragraphs just boring and links within the text force me to read at least the sentence if not the whole thing.\r<br\/>\r<br\/>Nevermind my rambling, it's a good story you got there, a few sketches or drawings, and background sounds if you can get that into twine (i used howlerjs), you need a scary feeling and we humans react great on scary sounds :)"},{"author_name":"wazoo","author_uid":"2820","time":"Aug 26, 2013 @ 5:24pm","epoch":1377537540,"text":"Thanks ananasblau - much appreciate the feedback. It's my first venture into Twine, so thanks for those suggestions. \r<br\/>\r<br\/>No it's not the &quot;final&quot; version, I've just updated my entry now with the entire story..but I have a few hours left for some candy - images and sounds!"},{"author_name":"wazoo","author_uid":"2820","time":"Aug 26, 2013 @ 5:29pm","epoch":1377537840,"text":"And to directly answer your question, no it's not Twine that forces the page \/ link structure. I grew up on Choose your Own Adventure books, but you're right...these days it's probably better to try and update that type of presentation.\r<br\/>\r<br\/>TBH I find the layout options of Twine pretty undesirable in general. If I have time, I'll try to hack up the CSS to create something a little more fetching..."},{"author_name":"VoxPlacitum","author_uid":"25802","time":"Aug 30, 2013 @ 1:24pm","epoch":1377868740,"text":"Not bad. Enjoyed the read. Good atmosphere, but I wish you took a little more time to build up to it, to allow the reader to &quot;forget&quot; the 10 seconds thing. Then you drop it on them."},{"author_name":"Christina Nordlander","author_uid":"20504","time":"Sep 1, 2013 @ 11:07pm","epoch":1378076520,"text":"Kind of a generic horror story, though it works pretty well in building the mood without any overtly scary events. The puzzle makes good use of Twine's suitability for adventure game making.\r<br\/>\r<br\/>A few typoes: &quot;lept&quot; should be &quot;leapt&quot;, &quot;la derniere dix&quot; should be &quot;les dernieres dix&quot; (*I believe*; French isn't my first language), &quot;ton vies&quot; should be &quot;tes vies&quot;. &quot;its'&quot; should be &quot;its&quot; (no apostrophe). Also, a fact nitpick: dynamite wasn't invented until the 19th century.\r<br\/>\r<br\/>\r<br\/>SPOILERS\r<br\/>\r<br\/>The ending was very abrupt, and felt rushed."},{"author_name":"ENDESGA","author_uid":"19270","time":"Sep 17, 2013 @ 12:26am","epoch":1379377260,"text":"cool :)\r<br\/>\r<br\/>-ENDESGA"}],"images":["ld27\/2820-612b6ef1b7a5dd599758188494c384f8.jpg"],"links":[{"url":"http:\/\/apps.wazooinc.com\/ld27\/la-derniere-dix-secondes.html","text":"Web"}],"metadata":{"g_key":"24935","g_author":"2820","g_event":"LD27","g_eventkey":"18","g_subevent":"JAM","g_urlkey":"24965","g_title":"The Final 10 Seconds","g_status":"UCHK1","g_place":"99999","g_commentcount":"6","g_site2_node_id":"0","g_hide":"N","g_has_icon":"Y","g_rqueue":"0","g_random":"0"},"nds":[],"node":null,"orig_images":["http:\/\/ludumdare.com\/compo\/wp-content\/compo2\/\/273708\/2820-shot0.png-eq-900-500.jpg"],"text":"You're an intern working for a publisher being sent to a remote location in the forest. Your publisher wants you to investigate some claims about some cabins that have been abandoned since the 1500's. After a 3 day hike into the forest, you're excited to find the spot but realize you're all alone...or are you?","title":"The Final 10 Seconds"}