{"author_link":"\/author\/withoutpillow\/","author_name":"withoutpillow","author_uid":"27525","comments":[{"author_name":"Sebastian","author_uid":"20818","time":"Aug 26, 2013 @ 10:05am","epoch":1377511200,"text":"Very short, but quite powerful."},{"author_name":"Armix","author_uid":"15191","time":"Aug 26, 2013 @ 11:17am","epoch":1377515520,"text":"I liked the smooth and clean way of telling a story. The premise of leaving something behind for (I take it as) love; like @sebastian said: powerful."},{"author_name":"CuberToy","author_uid":"10985","time":"Aug 26, 2013 @ 11:21am","epoch":1377515760,"text":"A well writen story, with a bit of interactivity. This may not be a "game", ut it is great to experience."},{"author_name":"PaperBlurt","author_uid":"26530","time":"Aug 26, 2013 @ 12:37pm","epoch":1377520320,"text":"Too short, and not really a "game", but that's way it is with Twine games. It looked real good, but could have made something more of the two choices.."},{"author_name":"TheJackiMonster","author_uid":"14882","time":"Aug 26, 2013 @ 2:18pm","epoch":1377526380,"text":"Short and nice! :D"},{"author_name":"RobotParking","author_uid":"26005","time":"Aug 26, 2013 @ 3:04pm","epoch":1377529140,"text":"Very cool. I like the changes to the Twine interface."},{"author_name":"TwilightFlandre","author_uid":"14448","time":"Aug 26, 2013 @ 5:37pm","epoch":1377538320,"text":"It's a short "game" but I don't mind that much. The story is clean and impactful. Very well written."},{"author_name":"Liz England","author_uid":"22429","time":"Aug 26, 2013 @ 7:51pm","epoch":1377546360,"text":"Awwww. Yeah this was great. Very moving in such a short time span. I adore the way you used the theme.\r\rTwine is pretty much built for this kind of game. When picking a place to add player input\/interactivity within a narrative... well, I think you did it right, in the way with the most impact :)"},{"author_name":"Obscuremoon","author_uid":"16732","time":"Aug 26, 2013 @ 9:03pm","epoch":1377550680,"text":"Wow, I was hoping in the second ending that I'd see him :'("},{"author_name":"Vasileiadis","author_uid":"25993","time":"Aug 26, 2013 @ 9:04pm","epoch":1377550740,"text":"Interesting.. wish it had more parts :D"},{"author_name":"withoutpillow","author_uid":"27525","time":"Aug 27, 2013 @ 9:58am","epoch":1377597180,"text":"thank you all for playing and commenting!"},{"author_name":"pragmascript","author_uid":"3751","time":"Aug 27, 2013 @ 1:02pm","epoch":1377608220,"text":"I liked this."},{"author_name":"Laelien","author_uid":"25981","time":"Aug 27, 2013 @ 1:13pm","epoch":1377608880,"text":"Ooooooh. Nice and beautiful, well done."},{"author_name":"chrisamaphone","author_uid":"2634","time":"Aug 27, 2013 @ 6:02pm","epoch":1377626220,"text":"Lovely piece. :) Thanks for the comments on my submission, too."},{"author_name":"Tainted_Code","author_uid":"5752","time":"Aug 28, 2013 @ 2:15pm","epoch":1377699000,"text":"I was clicking all the messages expecting a game at the end but there never was one. So I re-played and read the story very epic and though provoking I wish there was a simple piano track behind it to give it more suspense\/intensity!"},{"author_name":"GSM Productions","author_uid":"16481","time":"Aug 28, 2013 @ 2:16pm","epoch":1377699060,"text":"Very gripping. Some will argue that this is not a real 'game', but I felt that the single bit of interactivity was really what made the story so impactful. Masterfully done."},{"author_name":"MuciojadPL","author_uid":"21095","time":"Aug 28, 2013 @ 2:18pm","epoch":1377699180,"text":"Good and originally :)"},{"author_name":"lekochen","author_uid":"12928","time":"Aug 28, 2013 @ 2:19pm","epoch":1377699240,"text":"Good one."},{"author_name":"aglushakov","author_uid":"14836","time":"Aug 28, 2013 @ 2:27pm","epoch":1377699720,"text":"Very interesting expirience!"},{"author_name":"Sense","author_uid":"25280","time":"Aug 28, 2013 @ 6:19pm","epoch":1377713640,"text":"That's short, but very good."},{"author_name":"Martin_Monosys","author_uid":"20047","time":"Aug 28, 2013 @ 8:53pm","epoch":1377722880,"text":"A bit short, and I didn't feel like I had any meaningful choices, but I guess my game isn't any better in that field... :)\rStill, i get a feeling you could have done more in 48 hours if you really wanted! Maybe next time!!! ;)"},{"author_name":"theholychicken","author_uid":"25095","time":"Aug 29, 2013 @ 12:18am","epoch":1377735180,"text":"Wow! This one gave me the shivers!\rNice, small interactive interactive work with great impact :]"},{"author_name":"Drubert","author_uid":"25461","time":"Aug 29, 2013 @ 12:58am","epoch":1377737580,"text":"Hey! Thanks for checking out my game. Loved how you were able to boil down the feelings associated with leaving in this one. \r\rIf you wanted to add on something, maybe show us a bit more of the situation from the guy's perspective, i.e. him rushing to get there in time."},{"author_name":"M.O.U","author_uid":"27373","time":"Aug 29, 2013 @ 6:06pm","epoch":1377799260,"text":"very criative, i see some innovation here. Good work!"},{"author_name":"zlowrance","author_uid":"21441","time":"Aug 29, 2013 @ 10:42pm","epoch":1377815820,"text":"I enjoyed it :)"},{"author_name":"porglezomp","author_uid":"21051","time":"Aug 30, 2013 @ 2:31am","epoch":1377829560,"text":"Beautiful and powerful."},{"author_name":"BenWhi","author_uid":"19954","time":"Sep 1, 2013 @ 4:40am","epoch":1378010100,"text":"Was disappointed that it was so short. Started off really great!"},{"author_name":"Almax27","author_uid":"21581","time":"Sep 1, 2013 @ 1:53pm","epoch":1378043280,"text":"Nice storytelling, sad it's a bit short."},{"author_name":"Diptoman","author_uid":"25325","time":"Sep 2, 2013 @ 12:22pm","epoch":1378124220,"text":"A little more interactivity would've been nice. Got both endings, though a note saying "LOL" may have screwed up one of them for me. :P\rGood work!"},{"author_name":"withoutpillow","author_uid":"27525","time":"Sep 2, 2013 @ 1:02pm","epoch":1378126620,"text":"@Diptoman: screwed up? seems to me like you got quite the funny ending. but after all, it's up to you how you want to interpret the story. \r\rthanks for playing!"},{"author_name":"Antidote","author_uid":"27803","time":"Sep 3, 2013 @ 3:54am","epoch":1378180140,"text":"Really cool xD "He" must have been very confused with my message..."},{"author_name":"Marcos Rodrigues","author_uid":"16988","time":"Sep 5, 2013 @ 2:32am","epoch":1378348020,"text":"Really powerful. Good narrative, and well chosen words for the links, though I think one of the endings could be a little more elaborated."},{"author_name":"blackotus","author_uid":"19282","time":"Sep 5, 2013 @ 2:25pm","epoch":1378390800,"text":"Very interesting take on the theme and storytelling :)"},{"author_name":"Dotanukii","author_uid":"17685","time":"Sep 5, 2013 @ 10:41pm","epoch":1378420560,"text":"Nice mood and a really cool story!"},{"author_name":"panurge","author_uid":"21166","time":"Sep 8, 2013 @ 1:04pm","epoch":1378645140,"text":"Nice, poignant little vignette. I enjoyed sending a hurried message and I enjoyed receiving it too. Thanks!"},{"author_name":"Yakka","author_uid":"13985","time":"Sep 8, 2013 @ 1:29pm","epoch":1378646640,"text":"Minimalist and deep :)"},{"author_name":"Christina Nordlander","author_uid":"20504","time":"Sep 8, 2013 @ 7:24pm","epoch":1378667940,"text":"Pretty good story, well-written, if rather short. A bit too non-interactive for a Twine game. I like the way you incorporated the theme.\r\rCan't figure out how to get the second ending. (I thought it would come if you didn't leave a message, but that doesn't seem to be the case.) I might have to come back to bash my head against this game some more..."},{"author_name":"Christina Nordlander","author_uid":"20504","time":"Sep 8, 2013 @ 7:43pm","epoch":1378669080,"text":"Never mind, found it."},{"author_name":"manuq","author_uid":"26318","time":"Sep 10, 2013 @ 12:44am","epoch":1378773540,"text":"I love this interactive fiction. I wish you continue doing things like this :)"},{"author_name":"foumart","author_uid":"14368","time":"Sep 13, 2013 @ 10:59pm","epoch":1379112840,"text":"This was cool. I like the effect of this kind of.. not games but rather "experiences"."},{"author_name":"GeorgeBroussard","author_uid":"8631","time":"Sep 16, 2013 @ 2:53am","epoch":1379299680,"text":"Interesting. I typed "bye" and felt kinda bad :) Oh well, to the stars!"},{"author_name":"lalanl","author_uid":"19437","time":"Sep 16, 2013 @ 2:15pm","epoch":1379340600,"text":"I liked this a lot. At first I thought the end would depend on what I left, rather than whether I left anything. \r\rWhen I failed to write something in time, I discovered what the game actually is—a challenge against yourself to not just write, but also to be satisfied with what may be the last words someone who loves you may ever read. And the more you let yourself be immersed in it, the more important that decision feels.\r\rI think the people who are saying this is not or may not be a game or putting game in quotes are being silly. It is a short, one-turn RPG, and it's beautiful and undiluted. \r\r<3"},{"author_name":"Cosr","author_uid":"1454","time":"Sep 16, 2013 @ 8:42pm","epoch":1379363820,"text":"Short and simple, but still good. I found it unintentionally hilarious (in a way I really liked) when I misspelled my final message."}],"images":["ld27\/27525-5c2b907131f7e15e8d35f64e73a69420.jpg","ld27\/27525-d52f1a58895609fc53337c448476a798.jpg"],"links":[{"url":"https:\/\/dl.dropboxusercontent.com\/s\/35hvx7nyzpjxfkw\/notes%20on%20departure.html","text":"Web"},{"url":"https:\/\/dl.dropboxusercontent.com\/s\/55apv6e17knn400\/Notes%20on%20departure.tws","text":"Source"},{"url":"http:\/\/www.ludumdare.com\/compo\/2013\/09\/02\/notes-on-departure-postmortem\/","text":"Postmortem"}],"metadata":{"g_key":"23681","g_author":"27525","g_event":"LD27","g_eventkey":"18","g_subevent":"COMPO","g_urlkey":"23711","g_title":"Notes on departure","g_status":"UCHK1","g_place":"841","g_commentcount":"43","g_site2_node_id":"0","g_hide":"N","g_has_icon":"Y","g_rqueue":"0","g_random":"0"},"nds":[],"node":null,"orig_images":["http:\/\/ludumdare.com\/compo\/wp-content\/compo2\/\/273708\/27525-shot0.png-eq-900-500.jpg","http:\/\/ludumdare.com\/compo\/wp-content\/compo2\/\/273708\/27525-shot1.jpg-eq-900-500.jpg"],"text":"My first Ludum Dare entry (yay!), a Twine game about departure and choice. \r\n\r\nThe sf-setting probably has something to do with me reading a lot of science-fiction stories lately. \r\n\r\nPlease play in the browser's fullscreen mode for maximum immersion.\r\n\r\n\r\nTwo endings\r\n\r\n\r\nIf you want to restart from the beginning simply update the page.\r\n\r\n","title":"Notes on departure"}