Oh man, I ended up in prison and the game narrative stopped right when a riot broke out! What happens afterwards, I must know! (well I guess I jump to my death, but what leads me to that, I was a good guy man!)

Nice writing!

Good start, but not done as I understand it?
Keep it up!

Very nice opening. Once the main plot starts, it's not incredibly original, but that's not really a problem: getting to live an entire life in Choose Your Own Adventure form is a fun and solid idea. The writing is good, and I like what you've done with the background colour.

I gave it a low Overall score because of its unfinished state (I still haven't found a storyline that ends), but this is good enough to deserve a finished post-compo version.

Some typoes I found: "being flying" should be just "flying"; "birds feels" should be "birds feel".

I like this. Keep working on it!

Pretty cool. Not the usual game, but I like a good choose-your-own-adventure.