Burial by ben

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made by ben for LD28 (COMPO)
Burial is an esoteric text exploration made using Twine.

Burial is based on the short story Dilitriel written by Aliceffekt. It’s themes surround digital existence and life after death.

Ratings

Coolness 20% 1604
Overall 2.76 702
Fun 2.14 909
Graphics 3.05 436
Innovation 3.68 89
Mood 3.40 141
Theme 2.06 895

Feedback

PaperBlurt
16. Dec 2013 · 09:17 UTC
Looks real nice. Good job!
Like when people try something more complex than
the standard Twine UI.
kristoffer zetterberg
16. Dec 2013 · 11:11 UTC
amazing use of twine, but for some reason i can't get past the train part, assuming i should be able to do that. there's an $identity variable visible at times, maybe it has something to do with this? or perhaps the theme?
Linus Lindberg
16. Dec 2013 · 12:24 UTC
I like how you didn't just have a black and white console like most text-based games!
emmelineprufrock
17. Dec 2013 · 01:42 UTC
Beautiful work. I love the way you utilized the tool (Twine) to really capture the work you're attempting to do.
soy_yuma
18. Dec 2013 · 00:32 UTC
I've never seen anything like this using Twine. I like it!
somepx
18. Dec 2013 · 21:16 UTC
I did't totally get it, but it's a good experimental game!
GarethIW
20. Dec 2013 · 12:17 UTC
Couldn't figure out how to board the train, but I liked the use of Twine!
SnoringFrog
22. Dec 2013 · 07:23 UTC
Can't say I really "got" it, but it was very interesting (and it got me to go and read the story you based it on as well, which was quite interesting). Amazing Twine work though. Makes me really want to dive into how to make more interesting Twine things like this, since so far I've only made very basic ones.
Christina Nordlander
22. Dec 2013 · 18:48 UTC
I'm pretty amazed with what you've done with Twine here: real-time events, cycling links, the weird symbols looking like glitches, the works. The art is very professional and evocative. All in all, extremely interesting and well done, with immense amounts of mood. The concept is intriguing.

However, there doesn't seem to be much to do in the game, unless there's a way of getting off the station that I haven't found yet.

I'm impressed, and will definitely read the story at some point.

Typoes: "You are sitting a jet black bench" is missing an "on"; "infront" should be two words; "enscription" should be "inscription".
rosastegosaurus
02. Jan 2014 · 17:17 UTC
impressive, very well done of such a short time. good game!
Moosefly
02. Jan 2014 · 21:31 UTC
I don't get it. I don't know if I was supposed to get it. Not much else to say.
stvr
04. Jan 2014 · 08:16 UTC
Dark, creepy, atmospheric and very strange.
nyrrrr
04. Jan 2014 · 19:47 UTC
I like the idea. But I didn't get past that train. Stuck in a loop.
And I would have really liked some bg music.
But good job tho :)
BradleySmith
06. Jan 2014 · 17:54 UTC
Interesting take on the theme. :)